Slipping

Most of my poems are uplifting, I am a real person with real pain, and sometimes it helps to write about it. My mind is slipping and until I see a specialist it will slip farther and farther away.

 

My mind is slipping away from me

Thoughts long known seem foreign now

Memories both a blessing and curse

Yet they all are drifting away somehow

I fight the thought, and then it’s gone

Did I eat today? Yes, or am I wrong?

School, work, eat, sleep, stop

what I've done is escaping me!

Intelligent? Yes, I am for sure.

Yet, I can’t remember what I know

simple things get me frustrated

I can't remember the simple things!

Do my children look at me different?

Taking advantage, because I forget.

"But you said yes, yesterday mom"

Did I, would I, I can’t say...

It’s all just slipping away.

Mind as frail as this body I wear

My soul and spirit still full of life!

How painful it is to admit it

To say I just don't get it!

Well, even if I did, I would forget it!

Many things ail this mind of mine

Health, pain, scars of time.

Don’t be sad for me, its ok

I'll forget how I feel right now...anyway.

This pain ails me from deep inside

It’s something I can no longer hide

I’ll still write the songs of my soul

Maybe someday again I’ll be whole

 

 

Author's Note

This has no set rhyme or reason to it, on purpose. It is how I feel right now...I’m kind of all jumbled up.

Reviews

[Fréyjä Helv..]

The rhyming didn't matter. The sincerity of it just captures the reader. It's a beautiful poem by the way. Time devours us every day we live. Don't spend the rest of your life depressed and caught up with the past. That won't give you a healthy future. God bless...

[quinfinn]

strangely...i think i know what you feel here... very nicely written and cleverly expressed. don't wallow in it...revel in it! great poem!!!

[Loner]

Honest write which produces heart felt poetry...
great write really enjoyed it.

[Jon Settle]

This poem is very touching and relatable. Great job

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

Wow this is amazing!!!

[samuel foxtrot]

This poem, for me at least, scetches the image of a person drifting deeper and deeper into madness, scratching into her brain, bleeding out more and more ofher sanity with the passing of each thought, which is why I am not very fond of its conclusion, where said person comes to a realisation and resolution of her madness so quickly. In my oppinion it makes her struggle seem far less profound. As for the ryme- scheme and rythem, I believe as long as a text can transform words into emotions or something equally meeningfull it deserves to be recognised as poetry.

[Kimberly "Melody" Carney]

LOL, Well honestly thats very much how I am, I come to a resilution with most everything very quickly. I felt this poem and the str4uggle inside of my mind as day by day it wants to slip away from me, due to medical issuse, literally by the time I was dome writing the poem I hab peace.

[Kes]

I like this though. It still flows nicely. :)
The mind is a very scary thing - especially when it starts to go wrong. Our bodies we accept will start to fall apart, but we usually hope to cling onto our minds...
Great work, as ever.
K

[Pax]

first of all I like the picture.
i like the feel of the poem Like slipping away away from reality...
great work

[The Scholar]

I always admire people who simply write down how they feel to get it out there. How courageous. This is such a raw, emotional piece that I know is relatable to many. Great work

[A Soap Mess Stories]

beautifully written...

['poetry by bonnie']

So, so good, I tell from the words we know just how you feel, best poems are those through our own emotions, in your case (and mine) we write through our emotions, our best wrings also!!