The UnOriginals

This is a poem, a tribute of sorts to all the followers out there.

They're tailgating my every move,

a serpent after prey.

I smerk and listen to hear them,

only footsteps away.

 

They shadow me like mockery,

as if I am a God.

They truly have no real idea,

a mere seed under sod.

 

Maybe, I will purposely fall,

see them follow my lead?

I could create a fake religion,

design my own true creed!

 

Such foolishness, by crowd and fleet!

By choice they're blind and weak!

They never work to pay their way,

they speak with tongue in cheek.

 

STOP! and look at yourselves you fools,

following pre-pathed roads!

Make you own way, work night and day,

respect your burdened loads!

 

I am not a fool, nor shall you be,

nothing in life is free.

even secrets come with a price.

soon shown to all, you'll see.

 

~Melody

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Taylor Ann]

I loved this poem, especially the message. It seems today there aren't any 'origianl' ideas. Because so much has already been written, and we see where certain creations have taken people, but not always our own creations and where they can take us.
Each line was brilliant! I loved the entire piece. Simply beautiful.

[Enid Blake]

Impossible to find original ideas these day, but not impossible to describe those ideas in new and evocative ways ;)
Loved this!

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

I loved this poem. It has a nice flow and its very well written.
100/100

[Layla J Omorose]

Very well done. Originality is lost these days by a lot or writers. This was a very good poem.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I like this and I totally agree with you! So many ideas have been used over and over, obviously not by the 'original' owner. This is one of my favorite of yours, it's deep and beautifully written indeed. :)

Mistakes:
(Maybe, I will purposly fall,) --* Maybe, I will purposely fall,*
(I could creat a fake religion,) -- *I could create a fake religion,*
(designe my own true creed!) --- *design my own true creed!*
(Make you own way, work night and day,) -- *Make your own way, work night and day*

Other than those minor misspellings, this is a poem that shines a powerful message! Keep up the good work! :)

Ashley Rivers-- your friend ;)

[Dark Tower]

Beautifully written.

[Alexander143]

Nice piece. It's original!

[MOON]

Lovely write, easier to follow then find your own way.love the olde world charm of the write.

[Megan Simpson]

This is great! You have such an amazing talent!