The UnOriginals
A Poem by Kimberly "Melody" Carney
This is a poem, a tribute of sorts to all the followers out there.
They're tailgating my every move,
a serpent after prey.
I smerk and listen to hear them,
only footsteps away.
They shadow me like mockery,
as if I am a God.
They truly have no real idea,
a mere seed under sod.
Maybe, I will purposely fall,
see them follow my lead?
I could create a fake religion,
design my own true creed!
Such foolishness, by crowd and fleet!
By choice they're blind and weak!
They never work to pay their way,
they speak with tongue in cheek.
STOP! and look at yourselves you fools,
following pre-pathed roads!
Make you own way, work night and day,
respect your burdened loads!
I am not a fool, nor shall you be,
nothing in life is free.
even secrets come with a price.
soon shown to all, you'll see.
~Melody
© 2012 Kimberly "Melody" Carney
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I loved this poem, especially the message. It seems today there aren't any 'origianl' ideas. Because so much has already been written, and we see where certain creations have taken people, but not always our own creations and where they can take us.
Each line was brilliant! I loved the entire piece. Simply beautiful.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
I will change it, no worries;)
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12 Years Ago
Hope that helped...let me know.
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12 Years Ago
lol...you rock!
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12 Years Ago
I changed some of the spelling as to allow a better flow to all that get tripped up on it. Some word.. read moreI changed some of the spelling as to allow a better flow to all that get tripped up on it. Some words are left the way they are left, because that's how I want it. I honestly have a spelling level of a fourth grader and after three years in college, my brain still makes it the way it is. I love my brain! As wonderfully, goofy, defined and off track it is...it's incredibly original and wouldn't trade it for the world! I have to spell check every comment, verse and message I put on here...sometimes I don't want too and that’s all I have to say about that. ;)
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12 Years Ago
Let the words flow just the way you want them to, darlin...if some don't like it, their loss not you.. read moreLet the words flow just the way you want them to, darlin...if some don't like it, their loss not yours. Others who write real, they know what you are about.
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12 Years Ago
you are kind;) thank you;)
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12 Years Ago
writers write; critics critique...me , I prefer to write.
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12 Years Ago
I second that!
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Added on August 8, 2012
Last Updated on September 30, 2012
Tags: Love, pain, health, ageing, grace, life, abuse, poetry, wisdom, knowlage, nature, understanding, family, purity, soul, unity, equality, Sad, adventure, mystery, poem, romance, story
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Kimberly "Melody" CarneyDenver, CO
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