The UnOriginals

This is a poem, a tribute of sorts to all the followers out there.

They're tailgating my every move,

a serpent after prey.

I smerk and listen to hear them,

only footsteps away.

 

They shadow me like mockery,

as if I am a God.

They truly have no real idea,

a mere seed under sod.

 

Maybe, I will purposely fall,

see them follow my lead?

I could create a fake religion,

design my own true creed!

 

Such foolishness, by crowd and fleet!

By choice they're blind and weak!

They never work to pay their way,

they speak with tongue in cheek.

 

STOP! and look at yourselves you fools,

following pre-pathed roads!

Make you own way, work night and day,

respect your burdened loads!

 

I am not a fool, nor shall you be,

nothing in life is free.

even secrets come with a price.

soon shown to all, you'll see.

 

~Melody

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Taylor Ann]

I loved this poem, especially the message. It seems today there aren't any 'origianl' ideas. Because so much has already been written, and we see where certain creations have taken people, but not always our own creations and where they can take us.
Each line was brilliant! I loved the entire piece. Simply beautiful.

[Southern Cross]

Beautiful imagery..combined with a strong voice and underlying courage. Nice work. The picture worked well along with the content.

[afra]

i loved every single line of this poem ....well done ..i loved it so much

[Leslie Philibert]

A real cracker. I love the verb smerck and the original, courageous point of view you address here, really good work.

[stars are far]

I love the 3rd stanza the most..
Tgat was well done.. Keep it up :)

[Poetic Beauty]

Love the first two stanzas. The wording is amazing and crests depth

[Lisa Ring]

This is true. "Maybe, I will purposely fall, see them follow my lead?" is my favorite part. I can relate to the feeling of spite, wanting to prove their stupidity when they blindly follow and fail. Very well done.

[WILDERNESS]

absolutely true. what a write and so prophetic words. Beautiful, Melody u r superb........

[SilentDreamer]

Love the flow of this and how true! The image also goes well with this. It's sad how some people can't be themselves but instead mold themselves after another person.

[marytownsend]

This reminds me of the commercial many years ago where the young woman runs into a crowd of brain washed people and throws a sledge hammer at the big screen that is spewing propoganda! Hopefully there will always be the ones who refuse to follow the crowd! Great poem!

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Creative piece of writing, the message was clear and the words truthfull. loved it :O)