I Will Wait...

I do not write you, to make you happy, nor to hear you agree. I write to make you think and maybe set your soul free.

 

I have seen…

the swallow fall from the sky,

        on a windless summer day.

the missionary swear,

the prostitute stole his money away.

 a father, become the father,

of his very own daughters, daughter.

 

I am not …

amazed, shocked or entertained,

by any of these things.

 

I am…

 waiting for more!

 

Waiting to see…

 our children grow up  in a world,

never asking  gender or race.

when man finally understands,

religion is an impossible case!

 

Wanting us to ask…

who put the power in our hands,

to divide freedom by sea and land.

to choose the condition of one’s soul,

when we are all one of the same whole.

I will wait…

 

~Melody

 

 

Reviews

[Donald Cole]

interesting, and leaves me thinking, considering my awareness and how things do or don't affect me. religion an impossible case......considering religion is mans view of what God wants.....yes....
I like the way your words lead one to question their (my) own self and how I stand, in the light of me......
Nice write
Don

[Adam M. Snow]

Truly a work of art

[CHRIS ANDES]

witty in is content
=]
beautiful
very talented..
;p

[Destiny]

Lovely. I loved each and every bit of it!!

[JourneyBlu]

Lovely...almost each line is a topic unto itself and is proposed in such a way that it provides savory consideration. It really got my mind working and I think I could probably splinter every 2 lines into its own piece....that is how well it is at provoking thought. Excellent work!

[Lisa Ring]

Although it's an ugly subject (and much of reality is), your word choice was beautiful, particularly the use of "fathers" and "daughters". I liked the way it flowed. Very nicely written.

[Lisa Ring]

I wanted to add, I didn't mean your poem was an ugly subject, quite the opposite...only the subject I mentioned. :)

[Amelia]

WOW. This might be one of my favorites just because of the briefness and flow of the poem. It tackled a major society problem in such a graceful and sophisticated way that it hits you fast and makes you realize everything that made the poem so great. I really enjoyed reading it, I love it, and I'd love to see more of this

[caroline]

I like how the poem stresses different themes and how it is philosophical in nature.

[Poe Redd]

WOW. this is different from most other works I've read from you, and i think this is beautiful!

[marytownsend]

Intriquing poem full of depth and questions and perhaps a bit of melancholy sadness. Waiting often signals growth and change and looking at the world in a different way. It will be interesting to see what "the wait" will bring...