A brilliant Mind's, Very- Short Story

A very short story, with a very big point.

A brilliant mind was once condemned to die, by its very own master. It cried, "But why do you deem me to die?"

The master replied..."I've been told not to use you as also told what to think."

The mind cried, "But I've wisdom untold of a world brave and bold, do you still not want me?"

The master walked away with not even a thought...as he'd gave that ability away.

~Melody

Author's Note

I have seen the wondrous minds of men be tossed to the way side, simply to follow another’s thoughts on a matter. Rather it is; religion, morals or how we should do what we do. This breaks my heart in two. Where are the free thinkers that carry the dreams of what may just change our tomorrow?
I for one have always followed my soul it’s been around far longer than me.

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Oh wow what a write you have written here. You are right too with " A very short story, with a very big point". I love all of the true meaning in this with thoughts, freethinking, freedom, and life. This write hold so much truth, sadness too. The mind is a lovely gift. I love your inspiration for this as spoken of in your author's note, such a great inspiration for this small story. I really enjoyed reading this powerful write, indeed it makes a impact in the small space you wrote it in. Really nice.

[Paris Renay]

A poignant thought! Also, very witty and concise. I particularly love the last sentence. 'The master walked away with not even a thought...as he'd gave that ability away.' Such a sharp ending, it really brings the whole piece together. I find it interesting however, that you have this as a short story. I think it interprets its self more as a poem since it has a kind of rhyme scheme to it and is also very short. Just a thought. Great work!

[Michael Soul]

i like this!!! yes i also have been one just to throw dreams and heart a side just to try in fit in some where but to only not.
but now i find my self working on new written arts
first the new of my new set of works is (soul aisle of view)
tow meanings to the new what it sounds like and and the many's to dream life.
i only have one of that new set up just now
my remarkable ocean of word's

[light and ashes]

Great point in this writing, superb work.

[Laura Maidah]

It's trying to be more than it's born with.

[Pencrafter]

I really enjoy most of your writing. You have imagination and technical skill. However, I really diverge from your interpretation of soul and morals. Many creative and highly successful artists and writers have lived happily within the framework of a solid faith and moral backbone. One can easily have creativity and strong spiritual beliefs. Your poem seems to me to be saying that sometimes we may stifle our own creative impulse, for various reasons. A person's basic personality may be hesitant, meek and withdrawn, for example. Also, since I'm on my soapbox, the ancient Greeks started the philosophy of an immortal soul, expanded by religion, though not taught in the Bible. That's my trivia for today.

[*** Hey Jude***]

This is a remarkable statement that is powerful!
I agree Re: you :-) comment Re: your statement
"I for one have always followed my soul it’s been around far longer than me."
Love that.
I also agree that manmade religion only separates those who seek our spiritual evolution. Nice! ~ :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

A wise person will learn from elders and their teachers. To waste the knowledge and wisdom of great people is sad. I like the logic and desire of this poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Joanna Maharis]

I like the philosophy very much within this piece. Not only that, but personally, I believe you've done a beautiful job of establishing an emotional connection with your readers. Well Done.

[Muse]

I read this a few days back and did not have time to comment. I wanted to say this writing was so very very clever. @Riley's comment below...I know her struggle...but it can be over come. I don't think suppressed thoughts are healthy...it just poisons our immune system.

great penning Melody

Muse