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Standing beneath the willow tree, the marble angel stares down in comfort. A frigid wind blows causing the brown paper bag surrounding his whiskey to crackle in sinful misery.  He takes a hit of his cigarette illuminating "Emily you will not be forgotten and always be love" chiseled below the angel.

 

"WHY DID YOU LEAVE ME?" he screams. Collapsing by the grave tears swell in his eyes and he grasp his heart. a mist blows by his ear in a whisper "I'm still here Joshua" a feeling of shock fills his body his eyes widen and a sobering feeling fills his body.