Dust - Space 3

Letting you touch my heart,

know it’s darkest secrets;

Letting past love

and bitter memories

sweep away;

clearing the dust

solidly settled within

these harrow,

hollow walls.

 

Too full of darkness,

leaving no room for light;

Slowly I sweep

to clear a space

for the white-pale glow

of moon’s sleepy face.

 

Content to see you dance

across crooked walls;

In moon’s cold light,

near your shadow,

silent solace travels

through tunnels

in heart’s hardened,

Chalky veins.

 

Glistening sapphire stars,

my eyes in evening’s dark,

lead me through dreams

dense and dark.

I reach for your shadow,

muted and distant,

with glassy glare

that pierces.

Little quakes,

voraciously vibrate

through my heart,

harrowing up

the dusty devastation

that long years

comfortably accumulate.

 

Vision confused

by quakes

that tremble;

Reluctantly settles.

A bursting sensation;

A burning struggle;

Yearning in deep dwelling

puncture through

paralysed mime in motion,

with deafening silence

in a world shaken.

 

For a moment

all movement shackled,

and sound suffocated.

Uneasy quiet

... followed

by a distressful,

echoing sigh.

 

A fresh breath

of breezy silence,

dusty memories

swept away.

Sweeping slowly

the dense old dust

within this space

of feelings familiar.

Feelings made void

by voiceless

desires dormant;

Awoken by quakes

that shake and tremble,

familiar foundation

wears thin.

I softly sweep away

It’s vestiges

within this vessel.

.

Moon’s smile fades away;

Night’s glistening eyes

sleepily extinguish,

on the soft screen

of cloudy skies.

 

Eyes surrender

to vision of red and yellow;

In sleep I see

a shining face

ascend from beyond

emotive, liquid base.

Author's Note

I welcome any constructive criticism

Reviews

[...]

I am reading and diving inside your words. Feel that burning flames feel that hopes. Feel that all. Like all what you create. I know from my personal life. It s great find something like this thanks

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts! :)

[Mayank]

It has the elements, which burns you inside like a fire... that fire, which burns and recreate you.

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you again for taking the time to read and comment! I really appreciate it :)

[emmajoy]

Your writing trills and tempers in near alternate worded thoughts. You use fine phrasing, '.. Yearning in deep dwelling -- puncture through -- paralysed mime in motion, -- with deafening silence -- in a world shaken.'

There's a distinct sense of time past, of mood and need, of fear and passion. But then, as the pace increases - albeit quite subtly, the present is clearer but gradually more forgettable. And, the future is re-emerging into a strong, radiant reality.

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you, Emma. Niece of you to take the time to read and comment, thank you for sharing your take on the poem :) It did not think about it, when I wrote it, but the feelings that stirred when writing, can actually be summed up quite nicely by your comments :)

[emmajoy]

I so often get things wrong, but then, if three people look at a cloud, the eyes see different creatures emerging!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem dear Poet.
"Moon’s smile fades away;
Night’s glistening eyes
sleepily extinguish,
on the soft screen
of cloudy skies."
The description create thoughts and visions. I like the poetry that take you to new places and leave you with thoughts. This poem did. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you so much for your kind words! I am glad that the poem spoke to you :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.