Trust?

I trusted you

You started at the top

But you lowered yourself

Rung by rung

 

I trusted you

As you reached the bottom

Standing there as if nothing changed

Seemingly proud of your “accomplishment”

 

I trusted us

Knew we were a team

Thought we were playing together

But you followed a different rule book

 

I trusted me

Amazingly, I managed to keep it together

While you pulled me like a determined ox

To get me to lower myself

 

I trusted me

But have found that something is gone

My ability to trust others

But I still trust me

 

Written by: Mark Lamont

March 2008

Reviews

[Celtic Cat]

ouch. It's hard losing trust in others....that's a hard thing to get back. I am proud that you held your ground, and know that it's not you. I really enjoyed this piece, watching the other person step down the ladder....smiling proudly of their "accomplishment". It's a sad scenario indeed, but you presented it so well. Much love~~

[Little Mouse]

Ok, so, I've learned to be careful with trust but also found that unless others are proved untrustworthy you have to go out on a limb with each new person and trust them first. Perhaps you could write a companion poem going up the ladder?

This line is what got me going in this review:
/But have found that something is gone
My ability to trust others/

Perhaps "others" could be "you"
but I'm guessing you intended it this way, which I also understand.

Kudos to getting your work restored and back to writing new!
-:3 )~~~

[Fran Marie]

I trusted us
Knew we were a team
Thought we were playing together
But you followed a different rule book

Very well crafted poem ,deeply expressed and well penned~Fran

[Gary H]

Nicely written. Flows really well. Now you have altered a couple of words I think this is really smooth. I thought the ladder idea at the start was interesting. I was pulled in to see what was going to happen next. 'You', 'Us' and 'Me' work perfectly and I like the shape and the way you have used these. Hope you enjoyed writing this as much as I did reading.