You Lied

Finally, a little something new after hours of "restoring"! Inspired by anothers troubles.

You lied

I cried

But no one died

So you lied…again

 

I tried

To formulate a lie

I wanted to cry

And I hoped you'd die

 

A heavy sigh

We are still alive

And the lies continue

To multiply

 

Written By: Mark Lamont

March 2008

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

I tried
To formulate a lie
I wanted to cry
And I hoped you'd die

Wow...I love the way you twisted the same words in the second verse to have new meaning. What a super ending as well!!!

[Natalie C]

Once again a very raw and emotion felt piece. So fitting when you said that the lie multiplied. It always starts with a little white lie, only to end up into a massive world shattering demon in the end.

Nice job, I really enjoyed this!

[TheNewerLisa]

First, I love this, short and to the point, no words wasted, no more needed.

I just got my act together and posted my poetry back up here...please take a look if you have time...see you soon.

[Celtic Cat]

OK, can I just hit delete on Nykkiicia's review??? Would that be censorship? Dangit. Anyway, I'm erasing it in my mind. NOW, let's get down to it. I think it's clever and witty, so there. : ) Also, there is feeling behind it, which I can feel coming off the page, it's deeper than it looks. It's painful when you get down in it, and too true for too many. It's dark and honest, I like it. It's also completely sad, liars..... I can't say I'm not one, but I sure don't like them. At all. peace~~
Oh, and for anyone who cares....a wise woman once told me "If you don't have anything nice to say, don't say anything at all". : )

[Nykkiicia Cion]

u seem obsessed with dying in this poem. its not bad, but a little too simplistic i think

[Little Mouse]

NIce job Mark! Short and sweet, well, not so sweet on second thought. ; )
So glad you are restoring, it's such a pain in the butt I know!!!
I was a freak and didn't take breaks, crazy on a mission, it must be restored, all restored, all right now! : ) But I think you have like triple or more than I?
Super speedy power to you!!!!!!