The Heavens Tonight

Moonlight shimmers on the water

star-shine twinkles overhead

I look up towards the heavens tonight

mars is bright and jupiter cold

against the pitch black back drop

there's not a cloud in the sky to ruin this night

the smell of warm salt from the ocean

fills my nostrils and surrounds my heart

I smile and laugh inside my head

for I am happy once again

 

Reviews

[Paladin4life]

I love the imagery in this poem. It quickens the senses with vivid description. This was agood piece. I enjoyed all of the pleasant descriptions, especially the one about the scent of salt from the ocean filling nostrils and surrounding the heart. Good work and God bless. Thanks for your review of my poetry!

[Shane William]

Wow; descriptive. You took me to the ocean and filled my eyes with the serene night sky. Excellent write.

[Ryan]

Wow, I love the imagery, descriptive language, and the comparisons (for lack of a better word). No really critisicm on this one. So overall, beautiful job ^^

[Zak]

Hm....I like this. It is a simple, short poem about being happy. I like how you threw that there was no clouds to ruin the night. Good!

ZTM

[spence]

This has got a buddhist simplicity about it- appreciating things in the moment and an awareness of impermanence and the inevitability of suffering, (albiet that being from clouds that would ruin the this vision). Nice words- I'm well chilled out now, cheers, spence

[Sean Allen]

As much as I like this poem, I must disagree about the clouds ruining the night. Here is a photo I took that represents your poem and you might enjoy http://www.eclipselogic.com/Moon_Mars.html

[Peach]

Really cute and simple, I liked it a lot. :)

[Glee]

Wow! Absolutely loved this, its short and to the point. I like the way you portrayed nature. Sometimes being at one with nature is all we need, not just other people. Then we will realize that even when we are alone, we are truly surrounded by marvelous beauty - the universe.

[Bull Dog]

A very nice piece. Cool Beans

[ttom]

I love the title. This is a wonderful poem, keep looking up. There you will find answers as well as inspiration , to live and write by.