You!

Your liking to me is fake
You’re reason of my heart break
Time does not stop. and go on
I am fed up with my life, now alone
All you have done, this for me with no regretting
I know you have habit of forgetting
I am still alive by the Grace and God Blessing
Your care to me just fake and tempting

Reviews

[Chelsea Miller]

Awesome poem. It's so heart-rending but very strong as well, and by that I mean the words reflect a very strong and brave response to this difficult situation. Well done!

[Sami Khalil]

A lovely write...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Authoress]

nice poem!! a few errors in basic writing rules, but then, this is poetry, so you're good :) wonderfully written, i love the emotion

[Kamran Javed]

English is my second language.. so mistakes may happens.. it is very encouraging.

[Authoress]

ah.. that explains it!! well done for a second language!! or any language, really

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Friendship can be tough, especially when things go awry... I only hope the pain from deceit and heartbreak will heal quickly. Nice write.

[Kamran Javed]

thanks for reviewing.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

my pleasure. :)

[Jane P.]

Despite the broken English, I could still clearly understanding the content of your poem. You definitely expressed have a deep and personal interpretation of the themes of love, betrayal and loneliness. The poem is short and punchy and really captures the sombre and melancholy tone. The only thing I suggest looking back on is your sentence structure. I assume English isn't your first language, and that doesn't make your poem any less awesome, but you may want to rearrange a few lines so that they better express your ideas.
Don't get me wrong, I really like your poem! Great job!

[Kamran Javed]

English is my second language. so mistakes may happens.

[Jane P.]

I completely understand and what I was trying to say was that it doesn't actually detract from your poetry (which is awesome!) Sorry if I sounded too critical, I really like your poetry and I'm still reading through the rest of your writing!!

[one sky]

So emotional. I like the words...sounds like what I have said long time ago.

Thanks for sharing this.

[Kristin Lee]

Oh the pain of finding someone that shares common interest. But if we never experienced the trials and tribulations of love what would so many of us write about? I like your phrase "I know you have a habit of forgetting." And how you use the word "fake" in the beginning and the end, as if you're peeling back the layers and presenting the real poser.

[Kamran Javed]

this is real experienced so I try to present it accordingly.

[Kate Ruta]

It does hurt to find out someone is not who we are but at least we know who we are and we can move on from those who hurt us and who don't know who they are.

[Serenity Faith]

It hurts when we realize the person we thought we knew, we didn't really know them at all...well done Kamran.