The Boy Who found His Way

True love unlocks sights to new paths.

Sat in a small room,
wondering what he did,
to deserve this doom.
Lost his own sanity,
wishing he was far from here.
In perhaps his fantasy.

Instead the cold and dark,
keep him engulfed.
Lead out of light by a shark,
so think he did.
Trying to break the hold,
so that he knew not to kid,

Meditate long and deep,
through the days unchanged.
He found his way to leap,
he saw a Dove.
Sent from heavens gates,
which brought him true love.

Author's Note

This is the first ever poem I have published on the internet, please let me know what you think. Any notes on how to improve?

Reviews

[char]

Rescued by love. Very cute. :)

[Joan*Eckhart]

Very well done.

[Holly Mason]

lightly deep
I feel so bad for this boy locked away
knew not to kid...what a harsh world he had to endure
thank you for sharing your first internet poem lovely

[Matthew. A. Kellow]

Thank you.

[AmongSavages]

"Lost his own sanity
wishing he was far from here.
In perhaps his own fantasy"
I love those lines; they're very easy to relate to.

In the second stanza third line, did you mean to say "Led out to the light by a shark'"?

Really great work :3

[Matthew. A. Kellow]

Thank you, I'm glad you could relate to some of this poem.
The boy wasn't always in this dark place, at some point miss lead, into doing things that caused him to be in such a bad place. So he was lead out of the light into the dark.

[ArabellaMortimerHendry]

beautiful hun :) xxxxxxxxx