Impasse

The way you want things to be, will hardly ever be. Its hardest to become friends with someone who already has a soft corner for you...

I see him falling for me more each day

Even though I've told told him, this will all go in vain.

He doesn't stop dreaming of us being together,

knowing, in the end,it will give both of us pain.

I see him gazing at me most times

With all my strength, I try not to blush.

I wish I could be like his any other friend,

disappointingly,I'll always remain being his crush.

This is not the first time he is being like this,

he has gone for a girl numerous times.

And I am no special case of his,

'cause finding people attractive is no crime.

But haven't I told him, there is no hope?

Haven't I made this very clear?

I have already given my promises to someone,

And its not courtesy for us to be so near.

People tell me to keep some distance,

but there is no stopping him coming close.

Letting things be the way they are,

as a matter of fact, is the way I chose.

Sooner, I know, I will be replaced

by another prettier face in his life.

And it saddens me to lose his company,

'cause we'll never be what they call, friends for life...

Reviews

[Rahul]

Now, this one's just a "Misery" of your heart which's dispersed into the symbols of words .. Well, yeah, in colleges ..such sorta things always, even mostly, happen because as we step out the world, we find many prettiest faces and just cause of infatuations ..we made sins and then lament on it.. Every-day, every-new face's appearing right on front of our eyes which's attracting us striding towards that face but yeah ..your right...the face can be replaced with the another prettier face in future..yes, as the time accumulates, the heart bounces like a ball and as it finds a new face, it just crashes down over the other face to control the beats of hearts but no one can control the beats of heart. And be remember ..this's not love .. just an infatuations which's raising up like a flood .. lol in the world. It doesn't matter who like you, love you, tease you or hate you but what the thing does matter is ..who cares of you!

Friends never stay in the life for life, it's a fact...cos if they stay then let me hear you ..from where the enemies'd come? Isn't it? So, it happens ..just walk with the time and let the hungry souls wander around you ...if you have believe in you then no other one can steal you from you except your special someone ;) Nice poem, hope everything's been cool over there now! Keep writing! Your just ..simply beautiful at writing and yeah...beautiful in looking as well. Lol ;)

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Awww this is sad but spoken with depth inside, Idk how a face as yours and a heart at will could be replaced with another feel. I loved it :)

[Marie]

The girl was lucky to have someone to love her the way this boy did...most of us arent that lucky...good write up

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Actually you never know;
first, you may be special for him, who tells you you're just another "pretty face"?
second, don't blame him, as Pascal said: love follows a logic, Logic doesn't know
third, that's not always true, for example I had a crush for a girl that nowadays is one of my best friends EVER !
Great poem :)

[S]

Thanks :)

[Jack...]

This is so very sad because I believe I know just how he feels and I can assure you it does not feel good. I like your poem, I like the idea behind it and the thought you put into it. The flow is challeging in a few places, but overall it is pretty good.

[S]

I'm glad you liked it :)

[Prince Kenny Jr]

Great write up... the imagery created is very much appealing upon the second intuition... Great write up...

[S]

Thanks..

[Gerald Parker]

When someone's attention becomes an irritant. Some rhyming but it's not obtrusive. You need to take 'from' out of the line 'there is no stopping ...' A different slant on love which is a refreshing change from the love-sick type. It might upset people who are suffering from unrequited love! I am prompted to ask what made you write this? As you are a new writer, try moving away from abstract ideas like love and see if you can write about an object, an animal for instance. Then, from the concrete you move to the abstract. A very simple one of mine is 'Magpie.' which does precisely this.

[S]

I really appreciate your corrections...and I've tried to write about objects but that doesnt work for me..the results are horrible! Maybe I never get drawn towards object as I get towards abstract ideas!!! Can you suggest an alternative?

[S]

being a new writer, your reviews would be very helpful for me....thankyou :)