Awesome poem. I'm a big fan of music as well, not just the stuff people listen to, but in the subject as well.
Although, I have a few minor points to point out to you.
"And when i'm strenghten" = "And when I'm strenghtened"
"I know i'll win." = "I know I'll win."
And a few others but I will let you know about them later, Loved the poem none-the-less
100/100
thank you for that, especially for correcting my mistakes, it's because i'm not that good in writing.. read morethank you for that, especially for correcting my mistakes, it's because i'm not that good in writing, but i'll try :))
A passion for music is one of the strongest passions. I respect the idea and I love how you are able ot describe music in such a beautiful way. There's just a few mistakes in the writing like 'i'll win.' should be 'I'll win' and 'ii's God's gift.' should be 'it's God's gift.' But I stil love the poem.
Music is necessary to relax our mind and take us to better places. I like your thoughts on the magic of music. A strong ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
thank you so much, I'll try to make some more after my busy days are over. hahah, stay tune :D
The simplicity and naivity of your writing is somewhat refreshing. It is light and happy.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
wow, i'm glad to hear that i made someone happy just by writing a poem. i'll try my best and write f.. read morewow, i'm glad to hear that i made someone happy just by writing a poem. i'll try my best and write for more. thank you! appreciated :")
When people write poems it always very philosophic. Why? It gives poems more strength, but I like it that your poem isn't really philosophic. (tell me if i'm wrong)
I actually was expecting an other verse, I think you should make it a little longer.
Still a good piece of work.
I'm dutch if you don't follow me, ask me and I will try to explain :P
haha, lol, maybe it depends upon the person's attitude :)
but, thank you. lol, i'll try to mak.. read morehaha, lol, maybe it depends upon the person's attitude :)
but, thank you. lol, i'll try to make some of my poems longer, no worries! :D
12 Years Ago
Maybe I read some longer poems of yours in a little while... (is this correct English? idk) read moreMaybe I read some longer poems of yours in a little while... (is this correct English? idk)
Maybe you're right, we'll see :)
12 Years Ago
i'm sorry, coz im not that good in correcting grammars too. haha :)
Awesome poem. I'm a big fan of music as well, not just the stuff people listen to, but in the subject as well.
Although, I have a few minor points to point out to you.
"And when i'm strenghten" = "And when I'm strenghtened"
"I know i'll win." = "I know I'll win."
And a few others but I will let you know about them later, Loved the poem none-the-less
100/100
thank you for that, especially for correcting my mistakes, it's because i'm not that good in writing.. read morethank you for that, especially for correcting my mistakes, it's because i'm not that good in writing, but i'll try :))