Wise man

- Who is your friend?
- Loneliness.

- What are you doing at that time?
- playing flute of holiness.

- I am also and then?
- Clouds appear at the sky again and again.

- What are you doing then?
- After putting the dry clothes I roam from home like a wise man.

Reviews

[Becky C Strukamp]

Finally someone to connect the dots. Lonliness is our friend the same as love, hate, anger etc, once we feel it, we know it. and hopefully grow from its knowledge.

Excellent

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[CecilA]

Dupur,

Profound message. I never thought of loneliness as a friend. Then you bring in the flute of holiness and I get it.

You are on the right road; you write from the heart. Great job.

Needs a little TLC with grammar.

[Leslie Philibert]

An unusual syntax, the tenses give it an interesting feel, some of the prepositions ( at ? the sky) maybe need a edit. A good write.

[Tarry Franck]

Nicely done :)

[Icelanna]

I wouldn't call this a poem - it's more structured and used like an interview. I would rethink it's structure and the purpose of it. Are you just trying to get information or are you trying to convey a message?
Love to you x

[Natasha]

I adore the style this poem was written in. Question and Answer. It really does make you tap into what your pschye is about. Your poems always transport me into a different country and different time.

[Poetic Beauty]

I have read this a couple of times. It is abstract and I get some of the lines but not sure how one of them works with the others but that doesn't matter for each line on its own is a remarkable statement. Wise men do not sit on the side lines letting the world pass them by but rather interact with the world listening and experiencing the universe. There are some things you just can't learn from a book or photo like the true height of the Eiffel Tower or the beauty of the Mona Lisa.

[InsanityWriter]

Very nice. :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Dupur, thank you for bringing it down to my level. Because of it's simplicity I was able to just go with it and it took me where I believe you wanted the reader to go. I won't try to interpret. It's really there for anyone to see in any way they choose. It's almost guaranteed to have a similar reading by all because you have chosen words that are both universal and hard to misunderstand. The doublet form is well-chosen for this message too, in my opinion. It enhances the flow and rhythm. If I had one thing to poke at it would be the first part of the last line but it still works. So, well done. Again, you are getting better and better.

[Jon Roggie]

Simply well done.