Give me a word

Give me a word 

that is simple and like water 

to occupy love 

as a squatter

Give me a word 

that is free and like a flower 

and my happiness

want to spread over 

Give me a word 

that is white and sharp 

i am that hero 

playing the harp 

Reviews

[Icelanna]

I love the last stanza, the imagery in the last bit is powerful, the term hero I interpreted it as being someone heavenly like god or an angel. I love the fact you repeat the first line and follow it with a simile every time except from the last bit. Nicely done! x
Love to you x

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[Natasha]

creative writing! great write. simple and to the point. the second stanza i think seems to be the weakest word usage wise, but the last stanza is the best out of them all. it really does have an effortless flow to it.

[CecilA]

Dupur,

I agree with the previous reviewers that this is a great poem. I really like it.

Please help me understand:

Line 7 & 8. 'and my happiness wants to spread all over' ? or 'and my happiness wants to spill all over' ?

Line 11 & 12. I am that hero playing the harp' I don't understand the connection between 'hero' and 'harp' except that harp rhymes with sharp. The imagery confuses me for some reason. I see white as heavenly but not anything sharp or do you mean distinct. Are you referring to a heavenly personality as the hero and you become that persona? Sorry, I can't see or feel this. Help.

This is not criticism; merely my interpretation. Sometimes I stumble over simple things so don't take offense with my comments.

A great improvement in your translation. Keep up the good work. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and positive poem. Funny how somethings can bring peace to us. I like a song with a violin and a beautiful voice and song. There are some words that can rebirth hope and energy too. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[Tarry Franck]

Nicely done: My favorite stanza

Give me a word
that is white and sharp
i am that hero
playing the harp

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[Valentine]

Must be an angel if you are in white and playing the harp..You are writing much better as the time passes..Valentine

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[Valentine]

BRAT....

[Anna]

This flows very nicely, I enjoyed reading it- because it kept my spirit high. Good write :)

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[DrD]

I can always count on you to do something original and attention getting. You didn't fail me with this one and I loved reading it.

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[Tex]

well i just loved this little gem of a write. Nicely done my friend.

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[chandlerl]

I love the second stanza. A very nice write. Thanks for sharing. =)

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[InsanityWriter]

Nice. :)

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx