Male chauvinism

Boy said-

You are beautiful like a bird, 

flying in the sky, sky is my heart.

Girl said- 

You are smart like a sky, 

everyday, every times I want to fly.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A very simple but poignant piece

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[Baby Ricochet]

Groovy man like a good potato

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[Icelanna]

I like it, it's so sweet. Although I would use a ":" after boy said: and girl said: Other than that I love it! :)

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[Leslie Philibert]

Another good poem from Dupur.

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[afra]

awww this is so cute ...

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[gabrielle]

Notwithstanding the title, the bird and sky comparison makes this piece a nice love poem. I like it.

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[Anna]

I believe you have a lot of potential for writing, however you're not necessarily using it. Short and sweet is lovely a lot, but I also feel you had the opportunity to expand it to so much more! I enjoy the meaning, and I'm sure less is more in interpretation, but sometimes it is so little I'd like to have a little more of light to guide me. Good write however! :)

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx

[}Echo{]

I really like this.

[Dupur Mitra]

thnx