Art

Government needs huge land for making art academy.

For these,
government has been uprooted us.

Now we have no land.

No land to live.

Government needs police,
Government needs army,
to protect the art academy.

Although they know we have no arms,
we have no voice,
we have not a simple power to say that,
these lands is ours'.

Many many artists,
many many poets,
many many philosophers will come art academy.

Administration is fully concerned.

No incident will be happened there.

Government needs more lands for constructing art academy.

Reviews

[Ees]

You need some help with your grammar. As far as subject manor goes I feel like this is a fascinating piece. For the flow and the use of language- it could be more interesting.
I am going to rewrite your poem here, I won't be changing anything- just writing what you meant to:

The Government wants lots of land for a new art academy

Because of the government's plan-
we've been uprooted.

Now we have no land.
No we have nowhere to live.

Government needs police,
Government needs army,
to protect the Art Academy.

We have no arms.
We have no voice.
We cannot even say: Hey, this land is ours!

Many, many artists,
many, many poets,
many, many philosophers
will come to the Art Academy.

The administration is concerned.

They have declared, nothing will happen there.

The Government needs more land for
their grand Art Academy.


Or something like that. At least that reads how I feel like you meant for it to sound, though, what the hell do I know.

[InsanityWriter]

Interesting.

[Marissa Brazzell]

i loved it. i hate that the government keeps taking natures land and tree. without them the animals would not survive.

[Valentine]

This sounds like many governments all over the world..give less to the necessary things and little to the things that would do some good for the average person..Valentine

[Tarry Franck]

Very sad but still a great piece of work. Thanks for sharing

[Becca Bishop]

This is so sad and powerful!!! I don't know why (and I certainly hope this isn't offensive) but this reminded me of the Native Americans and how the British and colonials wouldn't stop stealing their territory and taking away they land that they'd lived on for generations. This comparison probably has nothing to do with the fact that we're studying this in history. Very amazing write!!! :D :D :D

[Becca Bishop]

This is so sad and powerful!!! I don't know why (and I certainly hope this isn't offensive) but this reminded me of the Native Americans and how the British and colonials wouldn't stop stealing their territory and taking away they land that they'd lived on for generations. This comparison probably has nothing to do with the fact that we're studying this in history. Very amazing write!!! :D :D :D

[Kurera]

nice, not many people can easily write topics like these

[DrD]

Once again, Dupur, you take a social issue and give it power through words. You speak for the disenfranchised and that is the most noble motive of writing. I appreciated this work very much.

[forevermore1218]

very well written. The only critic i would make is in your sentence "Although they no we have no arms" your first "no" should be "know". Also in your second stanza I would change the format of "government has been uprooted us." I would change it by saying "government is being uprooted by us" or " government had been uprooted by us." Please show the proper form of past or present verb in your structure. Other then that I think this was very nice and I am well aware of your political and artistic abilities within this poem. Well done.