when a man dies

when a star falls, a man dies

star becomes the tree

tree has the green leaves and beautiful flowers

flowers spread over one place to another

one man dies

but laughing thousand flowers

Reviews

[Baby Ricochet]

I've seen meteor showers

[Marie]

Wonderful thought and image in this, though set in slightly disjointed sentences.

[Ed Fagan]

I enjoy this perspective. It's hard to let go sometimes as we lose sight of the bigger picture.Well written. I respect the other reviewers here. However, I like this write in it's current form.

[.......]

wow so deeply emotional.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the outlook of the poem words. Good to bring nature and man into the same poem. I like the ending. Create a very good vision. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tori Hughes]

very nice. i love the idea of it. but it seems slightly out of order in the line placement. still very good.

[Dr. Wood ?]

lovely idea I am a little uncomfortable with the order of the last line though

[Tree]

A beautiful idea planted inside a beautiful poem.

Diego

[JiDonnelly]

I simply love it.
It's short but very striking to me, The message in this is very unique
your own little outlook.
I can't really pin what it is about this piece that moves me but it is a masterpiece
for being so short.
Subbed man'

-JiDonnelly'

[InsanityWriter]

Nice write. :)