A girl wanted to be a poet

A girl wanted to be a poet, her father said- nice news but her mother breathed loudly.

The girl walked step by step, a yellow coloured bird was singing a song and the air was filled with the essence of flower.

The girl wanted to express her heart, but the literary editor raped her.

The girl sat beside her mother without any sound and never tells her father that she wants to be a poet.

Reviews

[Tree]

Beautiful, melancholic and tragic. The narrator's voice is detached, which gives even more power, to this poem... Here in America I have read a recent story about young girls being taken advantage of in India, and the stigma that it brings upon them in some quarters of society, it is heartbreaking. This poem personifies/personalizes that issue for me. Thank you.

[Marie]

This is too sad...because the girl who might have been a poet...telling of a coloured bird and flowers...will never sing...

[Coyote Poetry]

This is a very sad story in the poem. To abuse and destroy a dream is wrong. A very sad tale in the powerful poem.
Coyote

[JW Edwards]

Well Dupur, I honestly wouldn't know beans from franks from a good or bad poem. I'm just a story teller. But seeing the other reviews it appears you did OK. I'm glad. I think you should keep writing, even if it for just yourself. I hope others get moved by it. :) JW

[J. J. Nightingale]

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[JiDonnelly]

Personal opinion, I fail to understand this piece.
I wouldn't worry about that because clearly it is only me
you have a very good response, I think I'm a little too uneducated for these types of pieces, I think I understand the message but I do agree with however
it was written slightly too blunt and harsh.

Please don't hesitate to request any other pieces, Apologies for the disappointment.

-JiDonnelly'

[Pax Analog]

Touching, & proof that poets should carry knives. ;-) Not clear whether the literary editor rape was literal or textual (literature is hardly casting-couch-like).

A poet is one whose soul is lyrically open. . .being a warrior of intent is also recommended.

Daring to be is the essence of art.

[Nautili]

Tragic.....such a sad story, heartbreaking that It happens

[Dr. Wood ?]

tragic tale...Unfortunately it contains a lot of truth

[Shubham's View]

Unexpected turn of events! Well written, but a bit too brutal and harsh I'd say.