Junkie

Like a wannabe junkie, I would finger the tracks on my arms

I used to be like this, hungry all the time

lurking around street corners, buying the goods

but never getting high, it was more than an exercise

I was a little girl walking around in her mother's high heels

I never knew love until you.

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

Oh... This is so good! "I was a little girl walking around in her mother's high heels" For me it's all in here: the innocence of youth, the crushed dreams of adulthood... There used to be someone in there, but maybe no more. Oh BTW, sorry if I don't make sense sometimes, English is not my first language, so I apologize in advance !

[Kristina Moulaison]

What!! That is not even fair. "English is not my first language." It better be a close second then. Some people on here you really want to ask if it's perhaps their second or third language, cause WTH, but you know it isn't. I really SHOULD apologize for my nonsensical writing now. LOL! Thank you very much for these kind words and I'm done talking to you now.
P. S. I hope you speak sarcasm.

[sithlordjp]

Sarcasm is a language I use very often... so, by all means! ;)

[fireblossom]

I feel this. Then we grow up. No more child's play.

Direct, lean and clear. Very good writing.

[Kristina Moulaison]

:) Thank you!

[Justin]

Damn this is good. You should be proud.

[Kristina Moulaison]

Thanks! Sweet! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i'm a junkie for your love.


as a little girl i pretended, then the pretend got real.

and you saved me, maybe from myself. i was that close to
actually using...life didn't seem to make sense...and then, there you were.

[Kristina Moulaison]

Nailed it! Thanks!

[quinfinn]

metaphorically or literally, this is a clever and passionate write. well done, poet!

[Kristina Moulaison]

Thanks so much! :)

[quinfinn]

welcome!

[Frieda P]

Whoa, this is like a switch blade, slices right through it. Covered an entire lifeline and so many emotions in so few sentences. Well done, love this.

[Kristina Moulaison]

Like a switch blade...nice! and thank you!

[Patrick Henry]

I knew a girl, many I guess, that "worked" the streets, and they used to talk like this when they would FALL for someone in particular that caught their eye different. I don't know if Junkie is am metaphor or what, but I like the poem. xoxo -Mark

[SilentlyDying]

Great poem, the voice is just great. I can totally imagine someone calm and, I guess, habitual. Going through the motions without any emotions. I really connected with it, too, I have that feeling all the time. Very moving :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Great use of words and thoughts. I like the strong statements leading me to a very good ending. You are a very good writer. You know how to bring the reader in and hold their attention. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[xx]

Touching poem. I can hear the voice behind the words, calm and collected, but more-than-hinting at a darker life before this one and glad that she has left that one for good. You've folded a story somehow into these few short lines, and I'm impressed by how you've done it. I'm glad I was able to read this piece, and I hope you continue to write! :)

-Mina