Beginning of the End

when I knew it was over

 

Full of hope

we started down this road.

But now, after

miles of brown dirt,

my feet on the dash,

warm dry air blowing

through my hair, whispering,

staring out the window,

choking down the dusty truth

this new terrain is teaching me

...I see.

 

Even before the smoke,

the long walk to town,

the deadly long stretch

of heavy silences

lent to us by the barren hills,

the blurry passing lines of trees,

and their tall, telling witness,

I knew,

that like the car we headed out in,

we would never

make it home.

Reviews

[Freder Fredersen (aka G..]

All the roads, the people, the changes, the experience...The mind takes it all in and weaves it together making it beautiful. This is the completely natural telling of a change. Thoughts that swim around during transition like fish in a glass head...to be viewed in their almost natural state. I liked it alot. It struck me in a deep and hidden place.....found a familiarity picked the scab. A mighty write. I felt it.

Cheers!
FF

[sithlordjp]

words filled with an heavy silence. This one touches me deeply. Thanks for sharing...

[Kristina Moulaison]

Thanks for reading! :)

[Jim Clarke]

You have a gift.

[AK]

Nicely done, really. Kinda sad, but hopeful too. A new start... and hopefully a new car.

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Misty,

This is a tremendous write of introspection. It has the perspective of time and wisdom. It captures a moment of clear vision and it aptly puts it down on paper. Clear distillations such as this cannot come without considerable maturity and experience in the ways of the world. Congratulations on a fine write and thank you for sharing your understanding and vision.

Kindest regards,

Rick

[Wondering Mind]

Vivid in it's description, one feels the moment almost as if.... A sad moment of realization beautifully written.

[Ana]

I love reading your writing! You are amazing and very inspiring. I really like your ending "I remember knowing,that like the car we headed out in,we would nevermake it home". Theres just something about it that actually makes me smile.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

All about the moment of realization, but done so vividly and beautifully. I lived this and you've captured it perfectly. I feel that this is among your very best & I am putting it where it belongs.

[Charles D. Moorer]

This poem put me in that place. Great short lines packed with clear imagery. Nothing was wasted.

[fireblossom]

great poem. epiphany comes to mind. the truth often comes when we are staring out the window not seeking it.

:-)