Descendants

(We revere youth's flawlessness, 

but it is in our own aging and

dying that we give life, 

an echo of our own 

brief blooming. 

These scars that are

left behind, our trophies.)

Seeds scatter
to the wind,
blooms fallen
under snow to ashes,
waiting for life
to resurrect from its decay-

this badge of death
that births
life's full bloom.

Like the scars she wears
in the shadow after youth,
a wilted flower
whose beauty lies
in the ground-
the forgotten fragrance
that made

tomorrow.

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

I really loved this piece. You really captured me and my thoughts completely with this piece. Your imagery cause my imagination to really run out of control as I have read this like 10 times now trying to pick which part was my favorite but as a whole this piece is perfectly beautiful. From the ideas that you present and the way you displayed life as being the scar or a badge of honor. As we get older and life goes on we collect more badges with the years and wisdom we gain through living.




This a truly beautiful piece of writing.

Great Job!!!

[Rodney Ray Hatchell / U..]

I think you are writing about rebirth of everything will return again to something new ashes and dust fertilized into a new be a flower or whatsoever it does return into something. GBU,,RodneyRay

[Clavus]

The poem is as beautiful as your description which, as odd as it may sound, would be a wonderful quote as an epitaph. It's inspiring and soothing, all in one. Wait, am I talking about your description or the poem? Both! I try and not copy and past pieces of one's work in my reviews but have to say that I think "the forgotten fragrance that made tomorrow" is one of the prettiest phrases I have ever heard. :)

[Kelley Rose]

I like this poem, I love your use of metaphors. It has wonderful flow, nice job.

[Being.john.sweet~The Ev..]

love the message and the reincarnation idea, thank you for sharing this, peace to you~john

[Taja B.]

This is a very nice poem. This is a well written poem that describes the cycle of life pretty well. Plus, you also had some great imagery and descriptions in this short poem.

Nice job.:)