I Stayed Up All NIght

I Stayed Up All NIght

A Poem by MissRed
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self-explanatory

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i stayed up all night

not pacing, just lying there

a rock in this soft bed

begging myself for sleep

but sleep doesn't come

when all i can think of

is the one thing i can't have.

 

i stayed up all night

your voice in my head

the feel of your fingers

floating just above my skin

your smell but a memory

and for the first time

i couldn't even cry.

 

i stayed up all night

mad at me, mad at you

sad for me, sad for you

and wondering, like always

will things ever be alright

is there even such as thing

as alright anymore?

 

i stayed up all night

because you weren't there

to hold me tight

or tell me everything is ok

we're hundreds of miles apart

in every single way

will i ever sleep again?

© 2008 MissRed


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This is a great idea for a poem !!!! Lots of great lines but these are a few that i liked.

floating just above my skin

your smell but a memory

and for the first time

i couldn't even cry.


my only critisim would be that I think that you need to edit the last two lines of the third stanza. Otherwise I found your poem to be wonderful !!Great job on the format and the poem as a whole .

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This poetry`s too just `bout the shades of grey that come through the winds of love. Staying late up all the night gives anew breath to mind but at the same time, it costs the "heart" very much in disguise of old-days-memories. I liked the flow of this line: "I stayed up all night".. very deep and full of insights. Nice imagery!

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is a great idea for a poem !!!! Lots of great lines but these are a few that i liked.

floating just above my skin

your smell but a memory

and for the first time

i couldn't even cry.


my only critisim would be that I think that you need to edit the last two lines of the third stanza. Otherwise I found your poem to be wonderful !!Great job on the format and the poem as a whole .

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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MissRed
MissRed

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I'm simple and complicated at the same time. I'm 38, a mom, a wife, a teacher, a daughter, and a sister. Those are the most defining details about me. I'm Texan and was raised on a cattle ranch, but I.. more..

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A Poem by MissRed