My Seven Thanks

Seven thanks for seven years

I thought it was impossible to turn you from a lion into a sheep, but somehow your shift was just too deep. I never would’ve imagined it was you. Or that you would want to. So love, thank you.

And then there was us, so perfect like meteor stars. And you were the most endearing and lovable man a woman would dream to have. You never made me feel blue despite the distance we’ve been through. So love, thank you.

Years passed and we were so ecstatic that our love was not too weak. Till fate gave us time to broke distance we hated for months. Yes! We were together and our love was greater, deeper with plans. You did care for me so. Promised to never let me go. So love,thank you.

Then I found out the immaturity you have. But then you never failed to let me feel I was the only one you love. We fought a lot yet there’s so much love every time we got back. I have found out so much in you. So love, thank you.

We never ever felt like we would fall apart. They even waited for our wedding to start. It was once our fantasy but we never took it so easy. I adore you so much for the principles you hold. And that I knew this story was bold. We really felt this kind of love was true. So love, thank you.

But even the best fall down sometimes as the song cries. Now as we got older and used with each other, dilemmas got tougher and higher. It made us drown like an iceberg of stone going down. Never got to wring to surface to save our affinity of love. We were together for long yet we didn’t noticed we were falling down so strong. But despite the issue they’ve threw, still love thank you.

Thank You, my last line of thanks for you. Though that love we shared was such a great loss. But memories will never close. We were so perfect back then, the kind of love we both got in. I’m sure we’ll missed each other again. Like how you made me fell asleep by night and saw your face and eyes so bright by the morning light. But then this is the end of this poetry about our seven years defeated love story.

Reviews

[Wonderland Asylum]

I love this, very well written, simple rhyme, simple structure, a truly beautiful write, lots of talent is shown in this piece.
There are a few grammar errors that you should fix to make this flow more easily.
Here's the first,¨You never made me felt blue¨, you should change ´felt´ to feel.
Second, ¨You did cared for me so.¨, change ´cared´ to care.
Third,¨felt like we’ll fall apart,¨ ´we’ll´ should be we would.
My favorite line of the whole piece is this one,
¨ I’m sure we’ll missed each other again. Like how you made me fell asleep by night and saw your face and eyes so bright by the morning light¨
There is such beauty in this line, and I can also sense the loss in this line, a person remembering their favorite memory of a loved one that they have departed with in some way.
Truly beautiful.
Continue writing.

[misspoether]

Thank you so much for that review..appreciate it.