Open

This is a prayer to God.

Open my eyes so that I may see

The beauty and the sunshine

Show me the ways that I do not know

That lie beneath my very own feet

Open my ears so that I may hear

Truth and veracity that seem to hide from me all so well

Show me way to honor their will

That I may live more peacefully

Open my mouth so that I may always speak

Of kindness and generosity from my heart

Show me the way to those in need

That I may fill their lives with hope

Open my heart so that I may feel

The love and passion of a lifetime

Show me the way to my very own soul

That has been covered up by life itself

Open the doorways to wisdom and knowledge

That escape me just as I begin to grasp them tightly

Show me how to live burdened with this power and pain

Let me always be true to your light

Reviews

[Dave "Doc" Rogers]

There is some raw emotion in this piece. I like that. The structure gets in the way for me. There wasn't a flow or bounce to the writing to make it really grab me. Since I don't get some spoken poetry at times [admittedly] I look for other elements where I can relate. The emotion and the word usages are nice. You certainly convey a longing for service, for more, a desire for help, ... almost a pleading. I see good potential in what you are writing. Keep at it.

Cheers!
Doc.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

love that - show me how to live burdened? that is such a fantastic concept, i want to remember that idea.

"Open my mouth so that I may always speak

Of kindness and generosity from my heart"

those were some of my favorite lines. some of the lines were a bit awkward- where the syntax sort of makes the reader 'trip' over the words, but thats nothing a little editing/tightening couldn't fix.

a powerful and beautiful prayer :)

hugs

[poetsblade]

good passion