Inferno

Poem made in English class using free association words from an object - mine was what looked like a small red plastic fireman.

Wake up! Wake up!

Open your eyes.

The clanging bell alerts us

that danger is at hand.

Heave on the uniform;

fluorescent yellow and not hard to miss.

Drop down shining metal -

entrance from the ceiling -

to the floor below.

 

Spotted Fido joins in, too,

sounding the alarm that

"It's time to go!"

before he hops on the

giant red behemoth

which only adds to the

raucous noise

as we fly through the night

clearing urban thoroughfare away.

No time to lose!

 

Three families, at least,

couldn't find the exit.

Fifth floor is no more.

Women and children can't know for sure

what's in store.

Nothing left to do but

raise the rungs!

Higher and higher towards

raging Inferno.

Scents of sweat and ash fill our nostrils.

Mighty streams defy gravity,

powering down upon ceaseless blaze

One... two... five people to safety

down below, before eager and morbid spectators.

Reviews

[Tabitha Dings]

I liked it a lot. I'm not used to reading poems that are free like this one. But this one was so beautiful.... You definitely have some nice talent. I'm a little on the lazy side with my writing and my stories end up having a lot of mistakes, but I didn't see any in this one at all. A good poem I always say, moves the reader in some way. Hey, I rhymed! I'm a poet and I didn't even know it! Oh, sorry. Anyway. Yours definitely moved me and it was very colorful with the descriptions.

[silent[rain]]

As much as this subject is a serious one...I did find some humor in it..hope that was/wasnt intended..i often finds things in writing most other readers dont...lol...otherwise it was a very good piece! It is a piece of art! Great work!

[PianoandPage]

"before eager and morbid spectators" - how true.

great energy throughout. i really like the colors and aromas that you used to give the flash and jump tempo to the piece.

firefighting is such a crazy and important job. i can't believe that people do it.