A Silent Reverie

Just figured I'd try writing some lyrics! =) It turned a little Linkin Parkish .... but oh well! They're still a great band, too!

"A Silent Reverie"

 

Twisted in this demented melody,

I find myself wondering where I should be.

Faces are fading, places are changing

Alternate, accomodate, I've revolutionized into a tranquil state.

 

Alone in this world, I feel so cold

Everything's spinning, I can't grab a hold.

Lost all sanity, I'm stuck in this reverie

 Too weary to retreat from this sanctuary of peace.

 

You don't see what this life really holds for me

In your eyes, everything is copacetic

But your ignorance has made me f*****g apethetic

 

Inside I'm dying, I can't keep trying

To make the pain fade away, I'm done begging you to stay

You tried to make me suffocate, I started to asphyxiate

But now I'm done with this charade, so watch me turn and walk away

 

I might be alone, but I'm not quite as cold

Everything stopped spinning now that I finally got a hold.

I found my sanity, so dissipate into your own reverie

'Coz I'm finally breaking free from this never-ending misery.

 

 

© Bunnie 2009

Reviews

[Chirinos20]

I really like this lyric. It really shows emotion. Good job! I agree with all the other reviews. Linkin park style of lyric. Keep writing!!!!

[Denni]

i really like this one! you should go find a band! good work!

[Frederick E. Conkling]

Very well written lyrics. Well done. a linkin park style tune would fit these very well.

[Nish Nish the Fish]

I LOVE LINKIN PARK! thye're on of my favorite bands :) so naturally i had to read this!
so watch me turn and walk away - i love when people use phrases of the imperative (command) form in poetry, its proof that you're trying to reach out to you readers, and thats pretty special. because when you've got such a great gift, theres no use in not sharing it!
i loved this because it's so powerful, i love your word choice; sanctuary, dissipate, weary...etc
i love poetry thats declarative of the writer's current state of mind/being. you've declared, in a beautiful poetic way that you're alone, and that this lonliness is satisfying, perhaps relieving.
A great write indeed!
well done :)
Nish

[Luke Masters]

Nice. Intense lyrics, flows well.I was trying to pick the exact melody in my head. It would be interesting to here what you go with when adding the music. Kewl.

[Idance512]

Very well said! But...will you confide with me about the undercurrent that motivates? I truly would love to learn more about you, the writer.

Susan

[Dennis Shanaberg]

I think this was a pretty good write. I wouldn't eve say Linkin Park-ish, maybe if like 30 Seconds to Mars and Jimmy Eat World collaborated on a song while really pissed off. Something like that.
Which that alone would be pretty sweet.
Regardless...

You don't see what this life really holds for me
In your eyes, everything is copacetic
But your ignorance has made me f*****g apethetic

I love this stanza. The power behind them, and not just because the power of one of my absolute favorite words to use conversation, is intense. Just the wealth of emotion that wells up against this person who is to oblivious to see the disparity between your life and where you want to be is fantastic.
In addition, I really liked this phrase: "I've revolutionized into a tranquil state" for no other reason then it's written very well.
Keep it up. This was an awesome piece. Try shootin for even more lyrics. I'd love to see how they turn out.

[Texas]

I have a suggestion. . . The last line of the second verse/stanza or whatever, try "peaceful sanctuary" or something like that. Just to go with the rhyme, "cold/hold", "reverie/sanctuary". Just a suggestion.
By the way, hehe, I love Linkin Park. I was like *bright eyes ans drool* when I saw Linkin Park-ish". I hear Shinoda doing the first two verses and the fifth verse, the third verse being the brigde and Bennington (spelling ?) and Shinoda doing the fourth verse as the chorus.
Self adverstising, check out my version of Numb.
*wipes drool off of keyboard* Love it!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Some really cool lyrics indeed... I can really see these sung in Linkin Park style...
I particularly like this verse...

Inside I'm dying, I can't keep trying
To make the pain fade away, I'm done begging you to stay
You tried to make me suffocate, I started to asphyxiate
But now I'm done with this charade, so watch me turn and walk away

[StoryTailor]

Haha, the second you said linkin park... Haha, made it a lot easier for me to imagine it. The flow is great, the words naturally blend together. The message of the thing was great too. *smiles* Yeah, it was great. I enjoyed reading it. I'm glad I took the time to look over it!