Something's Missing

I'm not really much of a poet, but I had a few lines stuck in my head so I figured I'd turn them into something. :) This poem is mostly about a dark time in my past, that I've for the most part come to terms with.

Something's missing, deep within

Cold, hollow, searching for an end.

Day turns to night, she's still aching

Longing for that bitter-sweet, blissful abyss.

 

With no more light, she feels empty

Craving refuge, sanctum, a quiet asylum....

For just one night, she wants incentive to breathe

To feel, to hope, to dream, in spite of

The dark in his eyes.

Author's Note

The main thing I would love to know from you is what this poem makes you picture. Who do you think I'm speaking of? Who would be YOUR person with dark eyes? :)

Reviews

[Melissa Rose]

I'm picturing a young person in a vulnerable and sickening position, being used and taken advantage of by a person with unfounded control. My person with dark eyes remains un-named for multiple reasons, but nontheless, he had a considerable impact on my life.
You have done a great job capturing emotion in this lovely short poem!
Welcome to Writers Cafe :)

[-K]

The main thing this particular poem makes me picture is a very depressed person seeking somthing-maybe love?-from a person who plays a significant role in their life. I think your speaking of your father? a boyfriend? maybe even God? My person with dark eyes would be my supposed father...All in all, I loved the poem. Check me out sometime. You might like my writing.?

[Thorn]

It makes me think of a father not loving you...
My person with dark eyes? I'm not sure...

[Psynexus]

I see a relationship that isn't working out in the eyes of the writer, maybe something that will never work out. It's that feeling you get in the pit of your heart when it's sunk to its lowest point, that feeling of being alone and discarded. Where once there was love and acknowledgment in his eyes, now is just a vacant stare like a dark hole. His very soul is all but burned away, buried deep within the abyss of himself.

Those are my thoughts anyway. Nice writing. :)

[Cloak And Dagger]

I like it. It's sorrowfull. And shows a tender side of you. it makes me think of A woman and her lover. parting ways. Obviously he is leaving her. And she just wants the pain to leave. To feel safe, and secure. like she did when she was in his arms. It's an amazing poem. Honestly. Profesional grade. i like it. Not only are you beautiful but you're a better writer then me. When do i win? :P