The Seven Minute Cigarette

A short story...

She leans up against the cold brick wall, next to the door of the local coffee shop on 4th Avenue. He stands next to her, his hands clenched up tightly inside the pockets of his winter coat. She turns her head in his direction. She watches him as he lights a cigarette from his crumpled up pack of Camels. He senses that she is studying his every move, yet he pays no mind. His habitual movements amuse her. He turns to look at her. She smiles and looks directly into his eyes. He attempts to smile at her, as his mouth forms a half-hearted smirk, exhaling a cloud of smoke. He turns his head towards the street and contemplates a cab ride home. She flirtatiously grabs the cigarette from his mouth and begins to smoke it as if he does not exist in that moment. He is startled, but he leans up against the cold brick wall peering over her without a word. She looks toward the street thinking of a conversation she had with her friend earlier that day in the coffee shop. She is concerned about her friend and thinks of how she may be able to help. She then thinks of the man next to her. She thinks about what it would be like to kiss him. She imagines his hard body pressed up against hers… the scent of his skin, the feel of his hair, his juicy wet lips… She snaps out of it and checks her watch for time. She is late for work. She puts the cigarette back in his mouth and says, “Do you know that it takes seven minutes for a cigarette to burn down to the filter? I would assume it burns much faster when you are sucking on it.” He chuckles and says, “Hmm, I didn’t know that.” She smiles at him, nods her head, and walks away…

 

Reviews

[Wolfwind Words]

I liked this! It was full of flavor and color. I could almost smell the cigerette smoke, by the way you wove your words onto the page.
I love the ending. So many implications there!
Great job!

[Leah Maldonado]

Wow!!! keep going with this!! I could go on to be a love story, in his point of view or hers, it could also go on to be a story about her and that was just a random event to get the next random amusing event to occur.
it was very well written, though I would add a little more setting description if you're going to continue with it, if you arn't I would leave it as is, simple.

really great, I'm going to read more of your work!
Leah