I. Love. You.

idk, feeling alone?

It all bubbles up inside

Wanting to explode out of me in a long string

Of random words and feelings somehow mixed

In a way that makes sense

To Me, To You, 

Because it came out

in three words we've all been hearing since birth

I. Love. You.

Three words that

Have caused Hurt

Depression and happiness for ages

Now used as an excuse

an Apology, a Temptation

Do they mean anything at all anymore?

Not to Me, Not to her

Not to him, not to them

But Maybe to you, 

whatever your mind succumbs to

is your business, but hey,

They love you

Reviews

[darkgurl]

Now used as an excuse
an Apology, a Temptation
Do they mean anything at all anymore?

I so know these words here. This is one heck of a write.

[John Morris]

A beautiful poem about love.

You have repeated a lot of words, do you have a reason for doing this? It might be worth opening a thesaurus and trying to muck about with it. The problem with love poems is that they all are rather similar and whilst this is good it does not stand out from the rest. Saying that it has potential and you as a poet. You need to take another look and think why not use this word instead of this. The first stanza is great but you seemed to of rushed the rest, is this your first write of this?

Take the second stanza, this is my interpretation of it.
Love passes, joining us singing to me, to you,
bursting out the seems, struggling I say
Three words, said without pause since childhood
Meangingless to parents, girlfirends and mates.
This time felt different. It echoed in my head;
I knew it was true this time...
I. Love. You.

That was me attacking your poem taking my take, do not feel you have to copy it but you can if you want. I wish you the best of luck trying to improve your poem. Do not let me dishearten you it is very good but like all things it needs improving.

John

Can you hear the silence?

22nd June 2010

[Wolfwind Words]

A brilliantly crafted poem! I can relate to how love has been taken far away from it's true meaning and context and is now more of a simple place holder, when a person can't think of the right thing to say.

Great ink!
Wolfie