Must

as i looked at you

the faint light shown on your hair making it blaze in glory

your pretty green eyes close

your face always looked like an angel when you slept

I couldn't imaging leaving you

abodaning your love

but it was for your own good

They would kill you

because of me

and because of your love for me

Reviews

[Mioki]

This poem seems to have a story inside of it. The emotions are evident. You've done a nice job creating the feeling of wanting to love someone and having to let them go for their own sake. The story may seem a bit clich�, but I still think you've made it your own in the way you wrote this piece.

[jessie]

pretty good if i were you i would make it into a book. very sad yet descriptive.

[The Elder]

Very nice Rachel! I'd like to see much more of this one,
to find out the reasons behind the statements.

[Jared Hughes]

This poem sounds like it could be in a novel or film.

Good poem!

Jared

[BLFK]

This reminds me of several movies (example: Spider-Man, since Peter stays away from MJ in order to protect her from his enemies).
I wish this would have been a little longer. . .
But I still enjoyed "Must".

Good job!

BLFK

[lots fo love ♥]

aaaaaaaaaah i loved it. it is wonderful! rachel again you are a genious(did i spell that right?)