The splendor show

The sunlight shines upon the flowers bloom

as the freshly laid dew glistens on the green, green grass

The tall trees look all grand in their gray bark and their leafy tops

looking down on the river that gurgles a lovely tune as its flowing water cools the afternoon

Bright birds work till their nest can suport new  bundles of joy

the noble nature holds splendors right in front of your bright eyes

It offers glorious shows for everyone to gaze upon

 

Reviews

[Wicahpi]

"It offers a glorious shows for everyone to gaze on"

great! just this sentence needs fixed...

either:

It offers a glorious show for everyone to gaze on (or upon)

or:
It offers glorious shows for everyone to gaze on (or upon)

Then you're set :) for perfection.

[Wicahpi]

"The sunlight shines upon the flower(')s bloom
as the freshly laid dew (glistens) on the green, green grass
The tall trees look all grand in their gray bark and their leafy tops
looking down on the river that gurgle(s) a lovely tune as it('s) flowing water cools the afternoon
Bright birds work till their nest can (support new) bundles of joy
the noble nature holds (splendor) right in front of your bright eyes
It (offers) a glorious show() for everyone to gaze on"

This is so sweet! Just a few edits for you.
Very nicely expressed. Good Job!

[TL Boehm]

beautifully done poetry - uplifting and resonant.

[Angel's Lady]

The sunlight shines upon the flowers bloom
as the freshly laid dew glistsens on the green, green grass

This is very beautifully written. You have used some very expressive and very descriptive imagery. Great job!

[Adela Muresan]

Lovely.
The imagery is splendid, but I think that you could have chosen to make the verses a tintzy bit shorter.
It's great dough � a real tribute to nature's beauty :) .

A.M.

[lots fo love ♥]

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

[Mintwhiskers]

(this is mooncloud) ooooooooooooooooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!