Life's song

Life is a singer

It sings all throughout it

sweet songs like  honeysuckle juice

or dark as unsweetened coffee

It may be as boring as elevator music

or sad and cold like death

It can change as quick as water's passage

or stay for some time

But life will sing for many emotions with a lovely soprano voice or a nice deep bass

Reviews

[lAcEy_LoO's Poems Site]

wow thats very pretty and very beautifuly written keep it up...

[Evil_Angel]

Very uplifting cute poem, you are a very mature writer for your age good job! :)

[Phoenix Wolf-ray]

I like this. Strong images... "sweet songs like the honeysuckle juice
or dark as unsweetened coffee"

Nice. I would take the 'the' out from in front of honeysuckle, better flow. It's raw, but strong. Nice work.

[Wolf girl]

This is beautiful, it really is Life's song, :)

[Daniel Thomas Andrew Da..]

It is 'Soprano' with an 'o' not an 'a'. Try rephrasing 'with a lovely saprano voice or a nice bass voice' to 'with a lovely soprano voice or a nice deep bass' (don't use voice twice in one sentence - too awkward sounding.

[Emily Rose]

I really like your similes here! They're very original and they work quite well with the poem. I especially like the comparison to music as "honeysuckle juice" and "unsweetened coffee" - great contrast there! It's great how you picked flavors so opposite of each other, too: one is light, sweet and delicate and the other is heavy, bitter, and overpowering. Great job!

[Kendall Edison]

I love the way you describ it its so true because it applies to us all

[Amanda]

very nicely put, this write about life....it can be any of the things mentioned and many others.

life is a journey, not just a destination and much like life being a song, the way you live it is important. to live it to the fullest is all one should do.

good job.

Always,

Amanda

[lots fo love ♥]

also like the title

[lots fo love ♥]

that is so cool. i like how you put that the song could be long or short depending on when you die