Floating

Floating

A Poem by Mia M.

I can remember.

Before I was like this.when happiness was every day

Not a fight

Or a struggle

Now,happiness is a fantasy.

I walk in a haze

in a cloud

Of my misery.

Breathing out

The air making clouds of my breath

I can imagine

That I am floating

Above it all.

Above the pain.

Above the suffering.

On a cloud

Of the cold

I can float away.

© 2012 Mia M.


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Rob
For me, the imagery in this works really well. The cloud of breath is not only able to represent the imagined freedom of floating away to a happier place, but also suggests maybe a release of something inside, like a feeling of sadness, as it turns from an internal feeling into something physical that can be potentially let go of.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I know this feeling...good expression, one small typo..of the cold? perhaps something different there?

Posted 12 Years Ago


I feel you in this one. I think we all, unfortunately, have felt this before. Very good poem overall. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


emotional read here, I can totally feel this write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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