I Want To Give Up

i want to give up

first time i’m walking home tonight

i’m leaving you behind

just like you

im just like you

this is my f*****g life now

i’m not the first 

and not the last 

but i thought that at least 

you would’ve cared

This is the part where I set my lungs on fire

To try and kill some f*****g desire

it’s yours and its mine

and it sleeps where you can’t find

stolen breath, broken hearts

this is what rips us apart

Reviews

[AliceWithAButterflySoul]

This was written well. I see anger overpowering the heartbreak. I like how you added a rhyme scheme towards the end of your piece. Something I want to put a lot of emphasis on is the use of your swear words. You used those very well!!! It really enhances the anger because of putting them in front of words like "desire" and saying "this is my f*****g life now." You did it so well without overdoing it. This was a very good write :)