Till Death NEVER do us apart

I like you just the way you are

Your smile gives me hope because you shine like a star

Changing can be hard but it's not plain like a card

your beautiful just the way you are

I know someday we are not going to be here forever

But will it separate us?, never

I see the light has dimmed in your eyes

I cry and sigh but hope you survive

I held your hand until you took your last breath

Eternity will always be upon us but never Death

 

Reviews

[Mirra]

I was also on the process of writing something about love that will never end even life after death but I somehow didn't nail it, so I stopped and just write another poem. But hey! You've got one here. I love this poem, the words I couldn't say and the message that were vague on the one the I've wrote are clearly written here. Great job!

[For Who I Am]

Thanks! I really appreciate it. The more comments, the more inspiration!

[Totoro-Sama]

btw, if you want to call me for a review, you have to personally ask me on a PM xD

[For Who I Am]

I'll Keep that in mind! Thanks!

[Totoro-Sama]

^^ No Problem~!

[Totoro-Sama]

"I know someday we are not going to be here forever
But will it separate us?, never
I see the light has dimmed in your eyes"

&

"I held your hand until you took your last breath
Eternity will always be upon us but never Death"

Those were amazing lines. Especially the last one. The first one I mentioned truly foreshadowed what would come in the end. But, the ending ... oh my Gosh ... it is true love when someone believes that death is temporary. :)

[For Who I Am]

Thanks! : )

[Totoro-Sama]

No problem~

[For Who I Am]

Thanks for reviewing! :) ;)

[Hibiki]

This is great!

"Eternity will always be upon us but never Death"

Great job ^^

[yuki]

awww kawaii!!! its so cute