The Juxtaposing Forces in This Conquered Mind

In regards to my anxiety and how it affects my mentality.

It is the mind which leaves distraught

or is this mind even of possession

as it betrays all that others have dared taught?

The hands of which that cannot resist being wrung

the motion seeming to be one that is never ending

as these words contained remain forever on the tongue.

The words of which must that must never be sung

are now beginning to coincide with any remaining possessed thoughts.

And though this may be true, the opposing sides must brawl

the ongoing fracas serves to torment

this mind which leaves distraught,

and here its owner dangles; hung.

These thoughts are possessed naught

and the hands of which continue to curl its clumsy fingers which tremble

as they continue to be wrung

all remaining contrary to what others have taught.

At times, the loosely hinged entity joins the fracas

with the misleading guide of his light

which gives the dying spirit unwanted power

though neither he nor it wish to fight.

This mind belongs to no owner

these thoughts serve only to betray

these hands serve only to be wrung

this place where the former owner has been hung

his light serves only to add a new side to the haunting battle

the entity's involuntary resistance

Nevermore, but evermore does this cycle parade onward. 

Author's Note

Try not to look so much at my age or the like, but more of the writing itself, please.

Reviews

[Omikron]

I really like your style and the way you write your poetry. I feel a kind of uniqueness and talent with you that i rarely see, and I think that, with some practice, you could become a terrific poet and philosopher.

When it comes to the poem itself, it's very free verse, but somehow contained, which is very interesting and delightful.

"This mind belongs to no owner", must be my favorite part. It gives the reader much to think about, it would be nice if you elaborated that idea and made something of it.

Overall, lots of potential. Keep working on your flow, and making the poem easy to read, yet mastering the art of writing in between the lines.

Looking forward to read more!

// O

[Michael Leon Wilson]

Dear Elizabeth

Great use of space for emphasis, your flow could use a little work, along with a rhyme scheme I'm interested to see your next peice

[Elizabeth Davis]

Thank you very much! I have another one ready that I will post!