Our Day

this was wrote on Wednesday Th October 2011 by a lad that was pushed a side for a complete stranger

when the haven's open thats is our day

the day we live in peace and harmony

the day we start our love

the day we have no scares what so ever 

the one true love of mine will be the day surrounded by our friends

congradulating us on sucses of binding us together as one 

the pair that will never un bind as we stick untill to the end of time

Author's Note

please ignore my grammar and spelling please and tell me what you think of the piece its self thank you

Reviews

[J.V. Stanley]

Friendship always comes first in any relationship, sometimes love is fleeting but the ones that stand close are the ones that hold you dear and true. That no matter how hard we have fallen, we have those that care for us on a level unsurpassed by any other relationship. Our friendships. The way you convey the strength in your message is clear. Bravo

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Very good write great meaning in small lines..

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

"when the haven's open thats is our day
the day we live in peace and harmony
the day we start our love"

my favorite lines!

[Calypso]

I think this is sweet and kind

[Everson Taveras]

Because of the poor grammar and spelling, it was a bit difficult to read the poem without letting such a thing go unnoticed. At least for me, it did not flow. Though the importance of friendship is stressed here-- clearly because of the event that you witnessed before-- only that much can be seen. I didn't feel it was long enough to have any depth, and the imagery here could have been better. The poem itself could have been more loosened, more harmonious and less strenuous. I don't mean to demerit your writing or your ability to write. I'm just here to offer constructive criticism. And if you are by anyway offended by what I have said here, you are more than welcome to delete this review. Keep it up. Thank you for sharing.

[Richard Anthony Goulart]

This is a great piece. It describes well your love for this person.

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

its a sweet yet simple piece...i really enjoyed it

[paradise]

Beautiful and simple great piece

[MmeCorpse]

Very sweet piece. :)

[Dove]

This is a nice poem. Its also very sweet too. I think you did a very good job on this piece. Keep up the beautiful work.