open up

open up

Knock Knock
It's grim
here to say hi
a bit earlier
than expected
I wonder why
was it something
you did
or just bad luck
either way
you'll be opened up.

Reviews

[James B Wells]

Interesting start, though I think it could use more. I like the rhyme scheme (though I think it might flow better if the first two lines were switched. Just my thought). I believe you could grip the audience more with additional figurative language, as the concept of Death at the door lends itself to creative exploration and is a territory you could do a lot with. I also like the ambiguity in the last line, but I do think it could be phrased in a more eloquent way that matches the rest of the poem.