The Ice Box

This is my first poem in a LONG time, so go easy :) Any suggestions or critisism would be awesome :)

Thump.  Thump.

The tile cracks under your feet.

Thump.  Thump.

With the weight of a burden no one can see.

 

Your smile is stretched so hard across your face

your teeth have one minute before they break

Your arms tremble with the weight of it all

a hidden burden no one cares about

 

You smile, you wave, just to feel awake

but none of it matters when you bend and break

Alone with your thoughts and pent up knots

misery fills, just the way you've been taught

 

Thump.  Thump.

Lightning strikes over your head.

Thump.  Thump.

Hurting with thoughts that can never be said.

 

Unforgiving stares swallow you whole

you feel you don't deserve to have a soul

Washing your hands until they bleed

but wearing gloves so no one will see

 

Frustrations others own stab inside

a heart so wholy you feel divine

Nailed to a cross but unable to call

you keel in silence, bearing the weight of it all.

 

Thump.  Thump.

You snap your fingers to the sound.

Thump.  Thump.

Of the sky exploding and to hell your bound.

 

This steel box feels so cold against your skin

it rips you apaart to let the salt in

The ocean rises, tendrils of water snare

your mind like pages, left dry and bare

 

Your lungs pump out your final breath

this ice box is all you have left

Living inside a box full of dreams

left undone, and now they'll never be

 

Thump.  Thump.

Your heart slowly grinds to a halt.

Thump.  Thump.

All your wounds are filled with salt.

Thump.  Thump.

How can I breathe

in this heavy sea?

Reviews

[...memoirs of a dream....]

Mike, I love you. There is so much emotion in this, I miss you and jamming.