The Golden Rule of the Library

I walked quickly through the library.

The back corner,

where a lonely chair and desk sat.

My book creaked open.

The pages ruffled under my fingers.

After several blissful minutes

I heard a scratching.

My eyes twitched, I scanned the room.

Not a soul.

A cricket sat upon my desk.

I smashed it with my book,

wiped its body off the cover,

and continued reading.

Reviews

[Miss Coral]

You write simply but with wonderful descriptions in your few words. I really enjoyed this piece, and think the rhythm and moment you captured were great. The only thing I would consider changing would be "Not a soul in eyeshot" to "Not a soul in sight", but of course, that is just my opinion. A great piece.

[Tanya7]

you described a simplistic moment so perfectly. great work!

[*Always be Me:)*]

wow i liek this. ur peoms are better then mine, but i like this! :) thanks for reading mine, and helping me out with them.

[azlamalo]

totally captured a moment...very cute:)

[Adora.xo]

Hrm... Interesting piece. The diction was inticing, but the ending left me wondering. And that wonderment made me re-read it again, and again, and again. What is the Golden Rule? Wonderful piece though! Good job

~Adora