In This Kiss.

Just a small poem on the beginnings on love, and taking that chance.

Defences high and spirits low
From all the hurt you've come to know
Unsure whether to stay or go
My offer there, my heart on show

Two tears trip over tired walls
Your mind pursues forgotten halls
The yearning in your heart, it calls
And slowly, your guard, crumbles, falls

With trembling hands you're well aware
What fleeting, small hope brought you here
Promise yourself to be sincere
We're lost inside a dream we share

Searching for doubt, but finding none
No pleading urge to turn and run
And finally this love has won
We came as two and left as one

Who knows in this what we will start
But in this kiss, I found your heart.

Author's Note

Any feedback would be really great! Thanks :D

Reviews

[RainC]

If I could, I would copy and paste the entire poem to point out my favorite lines! lol
Truly a gorgeous read for me! You never know when to take a chance on love but the journey is mysteriously beautiful...............just like this ink!
I love it!
*I want more please.....* :)

[miji]

Hehe thank you so much! :) Just getting back into my writing after a loooong break, so hopefully heaps more to come :)

[A. Amos]

I absolutely love those verses, very relateable! Amazingly written and well expressed.

[Deidara]

I don't have words. Ah, the memories why did I lower my defense?

[Wórdsmíth]

Tht's pretty amazin',, kiss...lol, i think you wrote it after get your kiss..don't say no, because your writin' words shows same...!!
well, what should i gotta say, touched me really. you just got me. words in each line showed mirror of yur heart...it's a fav. poem i think of mine that has become now...can you write more ...?

[zainul]

With the beginning of amorous deal you presented a lovely piece.
I am amazed by its structure and rhyming pattern which reflects your sincere efforts.
Four stanzas with four lines each with same rhyming is the result of much contemplation.
I congratulate you dear poet !!!

[I Shred This Cabbage]

loved this. you can feel the walls coming down, the opening of the heart, the branches lowering to reveal the sun.

Two tears trip over tired walls, was my fav line. Well done :)

[kink]

you are awesome..i hope i can pour this much feelings :)

[letheartsfly]

I really like this, you made a few really strong images such as tears tripping over walls, we came as two and left as one, and I love the way his guard crumbles, you can feel it when its read. Love it!

[Jon Roggie]

I read this the first time in the usual glance, and it caught my eye. I couldn't comment until after sitting and reading it a few times in a row. Thank you.

[Justin White]

This was truly amazing. I loved how it all flowed so well. It was a pleasure to read aloud :)