unherd

well i woke up in the middle of the night and i had this poem in my dream i wrote it down ive been haveing alot of dreams like this lately its a little creepy...but i like it.:)

to care for none to hate all such a crule fate unknown for most,

a heart to cold that nothing matters not life nor death,

 a small fire being kindled by one who knows not love an eternal struggle between what is wanted and what is expected,

 an emotion so misunderstood yet so strong,

 a hatred so deep that it can not be found yet unstopable,

 needs so strong they cant be controlled both fighting eachother so sad is this fate one that should not be just like me.

going so right yet so wrong tyring to continue a deadly prophecy

beginning is being, yet slowly and waiting.

a life torn

a life that should not be.

 a lifethat was not chosen

a wanted dream to someone who can not have anything,

 one person who affects it all

 unknowingly a dream so old halted by one so young

a thing unherd of.

love from one who can not care

  sadness from one who can not feel

  weekness from one who is invincible

 fear from one who is unafraid

  lust from one who hates warmth

  from a dark soul things unherd of from the beginning of time untill the death of all.

~~midnight_storm

Reviews

[HPsGurl1]

What you've written is really good but the only problem I seem to be having with is the structure ... I don't think that the paragraph format without any sign of where the next line begins is such a great idea to display you dream. Other than that, your words were strong and I could feel them. Great Job!!!

~ *** ~ Snow ~ *** ~

[...MysteryGirl...]

this is good.. and to think you got it from a dream..
but when you write a poem try to skip lines
try not to make it into a paragraph.
but i love it... it's really good..