Aaron and Micky collaboration

I can still taste your kisses
I can still feel your touch
Yet these distant memories
Are becoming too much

These memories, they taunt me
Remind me of a time
Where I was happy
Where you were mine

Nothing is permanent
Fate has its plans
Fate stripped your love
Right out of my hands.

Left here alone to mourn
Not wanting another day
I hope I don’t make it til dawn
So that in heaven I’ll find my way

I miss you so much but
Silhouettes are all I see
A simple reminder of
The better part of me

I’ll find my way back to your
love
For now I’ll bow down my head
And pray to above
Lord I want to be dead.

Author's Note

I'm so glad to have had the experience to write a piece with Aaron...It was an honor to work with him....:)

Reviews

[sereenaoutloud]

You both works extremely well together and compliment each other ....this collaboration is awesome. Well don both of you ! :))

[micky]

Awww thank you Sereena...Aaron is a great poet yo work with

[sereenaoutloud]

You both just meshed together really well and this poem is seamless as if written by one person!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
awesome collab you two.............
dark sad and powerful.........
i loved it!!!
:)

[micky]

Thank you so much Pushkar. ...it was an honor to work with Aaron

[Pushkar Prabhat]

responding on the read request.........this is still awesome!!! :D :D

[micky]

oh gosh sorry Pushkar...:) thanks anyway

[Pushkar Prabhat]

nothing to be sorry about!!! :D :D

[Alan Corbett]

Thank you for your reviews of my poetry .
Regards Alan from England.

[Alan Corbett]

I can still taste your kisses, I can still feel your touch,
yet these distant memories are becoming too much.
These memories, they taunt me--- remind me of a time,
Where I was happy where you were mine.
............................................................................
The last line above should that be WHEN I was happy,WHEN you were mine...?
Further down you have TIL...it should be TILL.
There is no one more critical than me. How are people going to improve if their work is not torn apart?
Punctuation as I have done on the first stanza. Capitals on nearly every line? Remember Micky you can only get better... and that would not be through me saying, your work is wonderful.
Regards Alan from England.

[micky]

Thank you Alan this piece isn't only mine Aaron and I did it together....I'll fix the error's thank you for the review:)

[Rajat malik]

Amazing one...thanks for sharing :)

[micky]

Thanks for reading :)

[Rajat malik]

You are welcome, forever :)