Stranger

I let a stranger pour me one more

"How many so far?"

I told him I wasn't keeping score

"Whats a girl like you doing in a bar?"

I could ask him the same thing

But I already know the answer

What will the end of that bottle bring?

The truth..his a chancer

A boy trying to hold his ground like a man

A broken boy trying to forger his past

Searching for hope,searing for someone to say"you can"

He looks at me but his eyes are hollow

I don't think he can hold on 

I return his look except mine is filled with sorrow

"How old you kid?"coz if he guesses he'll be wrong

"Fifteen"

And your in a bar in the middle of the night

"Well life's been kinda mean"

He keeps staring ,maybe theres something wrong with his sight?

He takes my hand and says"im 22 and I gave up a long time ago"

"Do you know what I see when I look at you?"

I answer with a simple "No"

"Much more than I had"

There aren't words to describe my shock
"Well isn't that just sad"

 He digs in  his pocket and pulls out a lock

He says "Iv'e never owned the key so i's useless"

He says"Some things were meant to fail"

He says "You keep this"

I ask where you going?,He says"In 24hours I'll be in jail"

"You keep that lock to remind yourself your not one of those things"

Little does this stranger know

He saved me

But before he can go

I tell him my thanks and I hope he will be free

He says "It aint nothing you not gna do,it's what you choose to do"

He says "Im gna go put up a fight and Im not gna be sorry"

"Remember,make sure you put up a fight,and don't you dare say sorry if you know you right!"

"Remember me kid even when im in jail"

He has a note  in his hand

He says no matter what you never fail

He begins to stand

"You gna make mistakes and its gna hurt,but thats the point kid,i swear!"

"but before you go home"

''Im one of those people out there..."

And he hands me a poem

I start to read the words

Only to realize I wrote this piece

"It's supposed to hurt"

And with that he leaves

Thank you stranger 

Reviews

[Passengerr]

'He looks at me but his eyes are hollow
I don't think he can hold on
I return his look except mine is filled with sorrow' - loved that line. couldn't stop reading. This is brilliantly written Micky. funny how a stranger could leave a big impression on a persons day and perhaps life.

[micky]

Wow thank you Richie

[MinorArt]

I teared up at the last few lines. Just a few words, but my God the power they have. Well done

[micky]

Firstly I'm sorry for the late reply but I really do appreciate ur kind words

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing story in the poem.
"It's supposed to hurt"
And with that he leaves"
Funny how we learn lessons and understanding. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.

Coyote

[Saddam]

"You keep that lock to remind yourself your not one of those things"

Kind of real story. Never give up, keep this good stuff coming out.

[micky]

Thank you Saddam:)

[Mayank]

GOOD WORK AND GOOD STORY, LIKE THE DESCRIPTION. KEEP IT UP.

[micky]

Thank you Mayank:)

[andrew mitchell]

Micky A talent you are in the maturity you convey, the understanding of others, the deception you find, that approach you define ,the clarity and acceptance to a degree you portray. Brilliant work my friend!!!

[micky]

Thank you so much Andrew :)

[Ashwin Thakur]

Story through poem unfolding the true depth of our feelings
You have to like this one
Great one there micky.......

[micky]

Thank you so much Ashwin :)

[alf]

Hi micky. Said it before and I'll say it again, your level of maturity is just stunning!!! You have told the whole tale of choice and consequence with such clarity and perceptiveness, it is mind-blowing!!! I love this poem. I love the depth of understanding, I love the clarity with which you express yourself and I totally love the message you send!!! A brilliant write!!!! alf

[micky]

Thank you once again Alf for the amazing review I really appreciate your words

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!!
this is truly amazing......
so much creativity.......and originality......
i absolutely loved it......
i believe this is the best one.........
:)

[micky]

Thank you so much Pushkar you have no idea how much your words mean to me :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are very welcome............your poetry is really growing............keep up the amazing work!!! :D :D

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Throughout the read it was amazed and well crafted piece of art...

[micky]

Thank you:)

[AaronFreitas]

What an awesome write. I really like the reference to the key and lock and how he never had the key. Provides such awesome imagery and a truth that sometimes people feel locked into the hand they are dealt in life and can never find the key to break free. Awesome write I loved this one :)

[micky]

thank you so much Aaron it means so much to me...u are a real friend and i really find your opinion valuable

[AaronFreitas]

Aww thanks :)