If the shoe fits?..

You never think its going to be you

until that day...

That day your foot fits the shoe

Until the moment your concentration begins to sway

When your'e problems weigh you down   

When your'e shoulders cant bare anymore 

When your head is to heavy from your crown

When you lose you morals,waking up on a strangers floor

You lost now...

Never to be found

You would question "How?"

But your mouth is to dry to make a sound

Withdrawal...

Shakes...

 The bugs begin to crawl...

Your mind racing,your heart aches

Disappointment...Shame...

questions...Pain...

Self hatred...a sick little game...

Left with nothing...ONCE again...

Reviews

[AaronFreitas]

"You never think its going to be you
until that day...
That day your foot fits the shoe
Until the moment your concentration begins to sway"

No more truer words than that Micky. I have been there and can totally relate. A very nice write my friend.... my pleasure to review :)

[micky]

Thank you Aaron...

[AaronFreitas]

My pleasure :P

[Akshay Rawal]

It must be about the time when we are dragged out of our comfort zone to face a harder realm of life. There we stumble, doubt our potentials but after hitting our head to the walls, somehow we emerge, and cross the barrier, advancing ourselves with a feeling of overall progress of self. The foot gets bigger with experience, and keeps fitting a bigger shoe every time. Nice poetry friend.

[micky]

wow thank you for your kind words :)

[Tayler]

I fell in love with this poem when I read the first stanza. Its so upsetting but I am a sucker for these kinds of poems. I really like it (:

[micky]

thank you :)

[613]

This entire stanza truly resonates with me in some way:

"When your'e problems weigh you down
When your'e shoulders cant bare anymore
When your head is to heavy from your crown
When you lose you morals,waking up on a strangers floor"

This was written very well. Nicely done!

- Brittney

[micky]

Wow thank you brittney

[613]

You're quite welcome! (:

[Saddam]

Original write here poet.
Great write and good read.

[micky]

Thank you....:)

[Mayank]

ahh this abandoned feeling is the most difficult to cure, we only resort to various stuff to make us feel better.... I liked the flow and the first verse...

[micky]

Thank you....:)

[Robert]

The reality of self struggle. Your expression is vivid.

[micky]

Thank you.....:)

[Jimmy Yetts]

A dark portrayal.
Unfortunately, feelings I once knew only too well.
I suppose, Micky, when life gets to be more pain and regret than anything approaching enjoyment,
abusers--hopefully--begin to move toward less suffering. Hopefully.
Hard-hitting piece of work, young poetess!

[micky]

I agree...
Thank you Frankie J i really appreciate it

[Yanina McKnight]

What a well-written piece. The repetition in the second stanza emphasizes greatly the meaning of the poem. I feel the emotional pain as the last stanza concludes.

"Left with nothing...ONCE again..." - my favorite line of the whole work

Great job my friend.

[micky]

Thank you soo much for the kind words

[Yanina McKnight]

You are quite welcome

[Pushkar Prabhat]

so much truth and reality in these few lines......
"winning is not never falling down but getting up every time......." so don't loose hope.....
sad dark powerful write....
i loved it!!!
:)

[micky]

Soo good to hear from you...thanks for the kind words.....
Hipe u doing well

[Pushkar Prabhat]

yes i am great.......was busy.......exams are about to launch an attack.........my pleasure...........stay awesome!!!! :) :)

[micky]

Thank you:)...good luck with exams

[Pushkar Prabhat]

thanks a lot..........!!! :) :)

[Jeyanthi]

It's amazing! the felt like these lines are mocking me. :D sick of begin played.
But the game confined the beautiful poem here.

love the title. :)
(simply wishing not the bugs to crawl into my shoe:P)

[micky]

Awww....thank you....

[Jeyanthi]

welcome anytime. :P