There... Reality...

There... Reality...

A Poem by micky

There... Reality...

She awakens from her nightmare 
Trying to run from what it left in her mind
Broken beyond a repairable state
But her reality is life isn't fair
They left her behind
And now... she lives with knowing hate


He longs for isolation
Anxiety takes it's tole 
He questions his state of mind
Filled with frustration
He decides that he played the wrong role
His reality... life isn't kind

Why is reality so cruel?
Why must it ruin them?
Why? 
 Maybe they were the 'fool'
Is this there "condemn" ?
Guess it doesn't matter, knowing they will die 

© 2014 micky


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reality can be cruel.. it can eat away at us... if we allow those doubts, fears, and evil to creep in and control our thoughts.. the flow is very good in this one.. and I love the subtle repetition.. it helps reinforce and intensify in all the right ways...

think you meant "toll" instead of "tole"..

also in next to last line think you mean "their" instead of there.. but not sure it works with just "condemn".. doesn't sound right in my head.. maybe use "doom" instead.. I dunno..

overall, well done Micky!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

10 Years Ago

Thanks April :)



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Another true and sad reality of the world. Well said and pointed out. Nice work Micky.....nice work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much Tara this is actually one of the few pieces I like :)
reality can be cruel.. it can eat away at us... if we allow those doubts, fears, and evil to creep in and control our thoughts.. the flow is very good in this one.. and I love the subtle repetition.. it helps reinforce and intensify in all the right ways...

think you meant "toll" instead of "tole"..

also in next to last line think you mean "their" instead of there.. but not sure it works with just "condemn".. doesn't sound right in my head.. maybe use "doom" instead.. I dunno..

overall, well done Micky!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

10 Years Ago

Thanks April :)
The reality of death. On one had at times it becomes depressive driving people to do things that may harm. Others it is a liberating feeling as nothing to loose becomes the driving force and it sets them up to do things that they would have never tried before. The irony hey?

Death wants you to appreciate life.

Thankyou

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

10 Years Ago

Thank you Rene it is a ironical situation =D
Such a sad and beautiful piece really good job Micky

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

micky

10 Years Ago

Thank you so muck Mikey :}

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