Book

I will write a book about you
I will tell you all the ways you've taken up my mind
I will tell you all the secrets that I hide inside

I will write a book about you
The way your eyes touch every inch of my bare skin
The way your hands caress the softest part of all my sins


I will write a book about you
About the way your lips tattooed love upon my soul
I will write these things about you with every perfect word

I will write a book about you
With all the things you make me feel

I will write a book about you
And how my broken heart has healed

Reviews

[emipoemi]

This is well crafted and well thought-out. The flow is seamless, and the imagery is grand. The only line where it falls flat is "I will write these things about you with every perfect word". For starters, it doesn't remotely rhyme with the line that it should be rhyming with (according to how the rest of the poem is structured), but more importantly, it doesn't sound quite right being a line that would continue from the "I will write a book about you" refrain. The first stanza does it well, because of the echo that elicits its presence, but in the "problematic" stanza (for lack of a better word), there is no echo. You have the refrain, then a good follow up line, but that third line doesn't quite follow up as well with the other two, and sounds more like an ending line to the entire poem...or a different stanza. The ending of the poem itself is fantastic, so I'm not advising that you tamper with that. Simply rework the "problematic" line so that at least it doesn't say "I will write these things about you" since all that is an unnecessary repetition of the far more powerful refrain. Play with it, you can definitely make it better. Well done, overall!